You have used some lovely vocabulary and I love the idea of the snow resembling ‘flying crystals; super imagination. Don’t forget to check that you have included all the capital letters needed and remember that connectives such as ‘but’ join two sentences together.
Thank you for sharing your writing with the 100WC.
Hi Joe.
Incredible description!
I really like the way you say you felt when the snow was rising! Next time remember to check for capital I’s.
Isabella
Hello Joe,
You have used some lovely vocabulary and I love the idea of the snow resembling ‘flying crystals; super imagination. Don’t forget to check that you have included all the capital letters needed and remember that connectives such as ‘but’ join two sentences together.
Thank you for sharing your writing with the 100WC.
Mrs Shaw (Team 100wc)