I loved the adjectives and the personification. Your editing is exsteme and spelling. I could almost taste the doughnuts and the lemonade. Well done
Hi,
I loved the adjectives.
I loved the personification.
The bit where you said dark green fizzy lemonade was good.
Remember to check for spellings.
Leave a space after a full stop.
WOW! this is pretty good! hope t see your next blog!
Great simile “as bright as the sun “. Well done. I would like to try some of that green lemonade.
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I loved the adjectives and the personification. Your editing is exsteme and spelling. I could almost taste the doughnuts and the lemonade. Well done
Hi,
I loved the adjectives.
I loved the personification.
The bit where you said dark green fizzy lemonade was good.
Remember to check for spellings.
Leave a space after a full stop.
WOW!
this is pretty good!
hope t see your next blog!
Great simile “as bright as the sun “. Well done. I would like to try some of that green lemonade.