Hi Luca,
I love your amazing description about all the smells like the bread. I also like how you compered the size of the shop with aunt Ems house. One bit didn’t quite make sense about the the emereld how they were bumpy and smooth but all together I thought it was a very good peice of writing
Hi,
I really like your work because you used good puncuation
where you use speech marks, and every where else,
you also did very good simelies like it looked as big as three of aunt Em’s houses stacked
on top of each other.
But next time you do a blog
try to use more describing words like one of the big shops.
Hi Luca,
That was a very descriptive piece of writing and
very imaginative too! I really loved the way you
described the smell of the bread, I thought that
was very clever!
Hi,
I really like your use of nouns and similes. You used a very good personification for the lemonade” fizz, drink me, fizz.” Next time you could try to use different shades of green in your description. But still it is really good.
Hi Luca I really like your personification I also liked your description of the smell of the bread I like how you wrote the hotel was as big as three of aunt Ems house. I liked how you described the green colour eg: Magical, green, dazzling. Great work.
I really like the adjectives that you used to describe the Emerald city, but the sentence where you said Dorothy ran her hand along the bumpy minerals and felt there smooth surface doesn’t make sense.
Hi Luca,
I love your amazing description about all the smells like the bread. I also like how you compered the size of the shop with aunt Ems house. One bit didn’t quite make sense about the the emereld how they were bumpy and smooth but all together I thought it was a very good peice of writing
Hi,
I really like your work because you used good puncuation
where you use speech marks, and every where else,
you also did very good simelies like it looked as big as three of aunt Em’s houses stacked
on top of each other.
But next time you do a blog
try to use more describing words like one of the big shops.
Hi Luca,
That was a very descriptive piece of writing and
very imaginative too! I really loved the way you
described the smell of the bread, I thought that
was very clever!
Hi,
I really like your use of nouns and similes. You used a very good personification for the lemonade” fizz, drink me, fizz.” Next time you could try to use different shades of green in your description. But still it is really good.
Hi Luca I really like your personification I also liked your description of the smell of the bread I like how you wrote the hotel was as big as three of aunt Ems house. I liked how you described the green colour eg: Magical, green, dazzling. Great work.
Hi,
I really like how you write FIZZ DRINK ME FIZZ but since its not really speaking you don’t need speech marks.
By Harry
I love your description especially how you used Dorathy ran her hand along the bumpy minarals. Can’t wait to see your next poste.
Hi Luca I really like your adjectives but sometimes you used them to much.
Hi Luca,
I really like the adjectives that you used to describe the Emerald city, but the sentence where you said Dorothy ran her hand along the bumpy minerals and felt there smooth surface doesn’t make sense.
Hugo
Hi Luca,good description ,and I’m not just saying that, and awesome comas,but more fullstops.
Hi Luca,
I really like your use of description and you had all of your 5 senses included. Your writhing was very imaginative.