Hello Cleo, 😉
Very good description and I like how you have used similes!
Although next time you might want to use something apart from shiny 3 times in a row
Hi Cleo,
I love your amazing similes and your well placed comma you could work on using something like metaphors or personification to be more interesting.
Hi Cleo,
Fantastic descriptions of the Emerald city, I like how you say the glistening palace is as green as the shiniest olive.
Hi Cleo,
great description I liked the way you put in when you see the glistening palace it is as green as the shinyest olive anyone has ever seen.
Hi Cleo
I really like the way you used the word ‘sparkling’ in your wirting, it gave great depth to your description.
Hello Cleo, 😉
Very good description and I like how you have used similes!
Although next time you might want to use something apart from shiny 3 times in a row
Hi Cleo,
I love your amazing similes and your well placed comma you could work on using something like metaphors or personification to be more interesting.
to cleo well done I like your description but my improvement would be try and write a bit more.
well done:)
hi Cleo that was great you wrote a lot of funny stuff and also you’ve put some great effort to your writing so well done.