Hi Louis, your description of the emerald city was very good but check it for puntuation next time.
Hi Louis, You could imagine what it would feel like to be there and there was some really good description and it was really nice reading it.
Hi Louis, I liked how you described the senses – what you see and smell in the Emerald City, next time you could include what you hear aswell.
Hi louis, I liked how you described the city with different types of green mayby next time you could add a similie andd dont repeat discriptive words like sea green twice
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Hi Louis,
your description of the emerald city was very good but check it for puntuation next time.
Hi Louis,
You could imagine what it would feel like to be there and there was some really good description and it was really nice reading it.
Hi Louis,
I liked how you described the senses – what you see and smell in the Emerald City, next time you could include what you hear aswell.
Hi louis,
I liked how you described the city with different types of green mayby next time you could add a similie andd dont repeat discriptive words like sea green twice