Hi Maddie M,
I think your discription of the emrald city is amazing. You have added in perfect discription, like you can sleep lazily on comfy beds and have put in four of the five sences (hear, smell, feel and see). To inprove, add in some emotions and some more similes.
keep up the good work,
Rosie
Hi Maddie M,
I liked your post because if you had not read the book you would now know a lot more than you did before you read your post. You did a few mistakes but not many, so I didn’t notice it very much. But I think it was a good piece of writing
From Eve
Hi Maddie I liked the end confession bit where it says it isn’t green the glasses just make it seem like it however you have room for improvement on your punctuation.
good discription and some intrestind vocabulary that some autors could be happy to put in a Book
Hi Maddie M,
I think your discription of the emrald city is amazing. You have added in perfect discription, like you can sleep lazily on comfy beds and have put in four of the five sences (hear, smell, feel and see). To inprove, add in some emotions and some more similes.
keep up the good work,
Rosie
Hi Maddie M,
I liked your post because if you had not read the book you would now know a lot more than you did before you read your post. You did a few mistakes but not many, so I didn’t notice it very much. But I think it was a good piece of writing
From Eve
Hi Maddie I liked the end confession bit where it says it isn’t green the glasses just make it seem like it however you have room for improvement on your punctuation.