Hi,
I really like your work because you did very good similes like as loud as a hammer,
I also liked your good use of the word green so we know the Emerald city is green
But next time you do a blog try to use more discribing words
Hi David,
I really liked your Emerald City description because you used lots of similes like as loud as a hammer, I also liked your way of describing green and you used lots of your 5 senses.
I enjoyed reading your report on the Emerald City. Your clever use of a simile to describe things ‘as green as a leaf’ put a clear picture in my mind of it’s colour.
I love to hear pop corn popping, and your imaginative use of a simile, will make me smile next time I make pop corn.
I love the bit when it says like a drunk man, good simile, but you should work on your punctuation.
I like your title THE EMERALD CITY DESCRIPTION but put a full stop at the end of the writing.
By Harry
Dear David
I liked your description but could you use some different words other than green you seemed to use it alot.
From Ben.
Hi David,
great description but think a bit on the puncuation.
Some good discriptive phrases and languge but remeber to use puntuation to make it more affective and esier to read
Hi David,
you used some great similes and also some amazing description.
To improve you might want to check your spelling.
Eusebi
I was blown away from that amazing piece of work you created. You put in increadible descriptions in your wonderful piece of writing.
I liked your discription but you couled use more full stops.You used good similes.
Great description David but you could of used the word green less and dont forget puntuation
Hi David
I loved your amazing description but on your first full stop you didn’t put a capital letter after, great try
Joe
Hi David,
Wow! I liked that you put “drinking like a drunk”.
Hi,
I really like your work because you did very good similes like as loud as a hammer,
I also liked your good use of the word green so we know the Emerald city is green
But next time you do a blog try to use more discribing words
Hi David,
I loved your amazing piece of work especially your similes. You could of not always say green all the time.
Hi David,
I really liked your Emerald City description because you used lots of similes like as loud as a hammer, I also liked your way of describing green and you used lots of your 5 senses.
Hi David
I enjoyed reading your report on the Emerald City. Your clever use of a simile to describe things ‘as green as a leaf’ put a clear picture in my mind of it’s colour.
I love to hear pop corn popping, and your imaginative use of a simile, will make me smile next time I make pop corn.
Wow David I absulootly loved your work!
But you could inproove saying green sometimes like verdant green.
Hope to see your next blog!
Hi,
nice descrption and i love it when you said a drunk man,
but you need fullstops.
good description and putuation cant wait to see your next piese of work
Hi David
love your description of green ,next time use more nouns