Hi Eve
You discribed the Emerald city really well and used your five senses. This is how you spell licking and this is how you spell friendly. The last sentence does not make sense so next time try reading your work to someone aloud because if you read your writing in your head you say what you wanted to write so you dont realise some little mistakes
From Maddie
Fantastic post Eve some great discription and effort went into this peice of work it definetly payed of well done just one thing i think you need to pracise is spelling but put that aside its a spectacular description!
Hi,
I really like your work because you did good describing words like fizzing
I also like the way you used simelies like sharp as a sword
But you did a few mistakes so read over what you write.
Hi Eve
You discribed the Emerald city really well and used your five senses. This is how you spell licking and this is how you spell friendly. The last sentence does not make sense so next time try reading your work to someone aloud because if you read your writing in your head you say what you wanted to write so you dont realise some little mistakes
From Maddie
I like how you write so the bright colourful friendly place.
Dear Eve
I like your similie ‘as sharp as a knife blade’. Your descripteve langage is also very good and your writing was very emotive.
From Ben P
Fantastic post Eve some great discription and effort went into this peice of work it definetly payed of well done just one thing i think you need to pracise is spelling but put that aside its a spectacular description!
Hi Eve I liked yours and you used good ways of the 5 senses.
Great description Eve but you left out the gaurdian of the gates apart from that loved it
Hi Eve,
Loved your description but next time try and envolve your smell sense not just your hearing and seeing or touching.
hi Eve
I like that you put the emerald is sharp as a knife blade.
well done
Hi Eve
Your description is fabulous and punctuation I loved the ending ‘bright and colourful place.
From Ella M
Hi,
I really like your work because you did good describing words like fizzing
I also like the way you used simelies like sharp as a sword
But you did a few mistakes so read over what you write.
Hi Eve,
You did a very descriptid peic of riting but some of it did not make senc.
can’t wait to see your nex blog!