Alex
I like how you put there emosions and what they thought into your writing and instead of just writing about it you wrote a poem.
Next time when I read it there were pauses in weird places, so when you finish writing it go over it
Hi Alexander
I found this poem interesting and liked you choice of vocabulary but thought that it could have been longer and had some more similes, metaphors for extra effect to the poem and to make it feel more sad and frighting
From Milla
Alex
I like how you put there emosions and what they thought into your writing and instead of just writing about it you wrote a poem.
Next time when I read it there were pauses in weird places, so when you finish writing it go over it
Hi Alexander,
I like your rhyming about evacuee and I like your adjectives(they were great) 🙂
Loved your post. Its really creates the atmosphere of what it must have been like!
From harry’s mum, Sharron.
Hi Alexander
I found this poem interesting and liked you choice of vocabulary but thought that it could have been longer and had some more similes, metaphors for extra effect to the poem and to make it feel more sad and frighting
From Milla