Well done on your story. Me and my brother used to wind each other up like this growing up.
I like the describing words that you use to describe how people are feeling or what they are doing like Ellie clumsily dropping the glass and how Michael reacted angrily.
You’ve used some great describing words here, and some terrfic details (eg turning the shower on full blast) which really brought your story to life. Great use of speech too! I look forward to reading more of your 100WC entries!
Hi Alfie
Well done on your story. Me and my brother used to wind each other up like this growing up.
I like the describing words that you use to describe how people are feeling or what they are doing like Ellie clumsily dropping the glass and how Michael reacted angrily.
Good effort and keep writing!
Hannah 🙂
Thanks for the comment Hannah!
Hi Alfie
You’ve used some great describing words here, and some terrfic details (eg turning the shower on full blast) which really brought your story to life. Great use of speech too! I look forward to reading more of your 100WC entries!