Hal I can see that you have really been concentrating in class- you have included great descriptive writing such as similes and good adverbs, as well as using an embedded clause! Well done!
I wasn’t sure what you meant when you said ‘killed this man silently with this man’s own life’. Maybe you could read your work through to check that it all makes sense.
I look forward to reading your next blog.
Hal I can see that you have really been concentrating in class- you have included great descriptive writing such as similes and good adverbs, as well as using an embedded clause! Well done!
I wasn’t sure what you meant when you said ‘killed this man silently with this man’s own life’. Maybe you could read your work through to check that it all makes sense.
I look forward to reading your next blog.