What an interesting and evocative piece of writing. Do you have any teachers like Miss Frown? I hope not! More importantly I know you always do you your homework.
What a dramatic scene, I really liked the feelings of hopelessness that your character had
…I hope that I wasn’t the inspiration to Miss Frown!!!
May I make two suggestions:
1. Try not to write on a coloured screen- it can be quite hard for some people to read
2. Why not try and use figurative language- such as similie or personification to describe Miss Frown.
I really want to know what will happen next!
You are definitely the opposite to Miss Frown! Thank you for those suggestions you have made for me to improve my work! I shall use them in my next piece of writing and watch out for another chapter of what happened to me and Miss Frown! I do agree about the colour of the screen as I think I went a bit over board. I certainly think that scene was dramatic. Thank you for commenting on my work as I shall be doing lots more! 🙂
What an interesting and evocative piece of writing. Do you have any teachers like Miss Frown? I hope not! More importantly I know you always do you your homework.
Awesome, Evie! You should have written more! Well done my dear 🙂
What a dramatic scene, I really liked the feelings of hopelessness that your character had
…I hope that I wasn’t the inspiration to Miss Frown!!!
May I make two suggestions:
1. Try not to write on a coloured screen- it can be quite hard for some people to read
2. Why not try and use figurative language- such as similie or personification to describe Miss Frown.
I really want to know what will happen next!
You are definitely the opposite to Miss Frown! Thank you for those suggestions you have made for me to improve my work! I shall use them in my next piece of writing and watch out for another chapter of what happened to me and Miss Frown! I do agree about the colour of the screen as I think I went a bit over board. I certainly think that scene was dramatic. Thank you for commenting on my work as I shall be doing lots more! 🙂