Abasis life

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5 Responses to Abasis life

  1. Hermione says:

    Well done I like your veiws on Abasi’s story next time try and explain it more.

  2. Holly says:

    Hi Clem,

    I like your piece of writing because you finish it with a memorable ending. Maybe next time you could describe how you would feel if you were Abasi in greater detail.

  3. Lola says:

    WELL DONE!!!!!!!!!

    I love this piece of writing!
    Mabie if you put some commas in the third sentance!

  4. Andrew says:

    This is well spaced out but you need more writing.

  5. HarryM says:

    Hi,
    I like how you changed the title but you need to right more

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