Hi Louis
Oh dear what a bad time your character is having in your story. You have really made me feel sorry for him by the way you have written your piece and the great use of vocabulary that paints a picture of the unfairness. Well done.
I really like the way you put a back ground to the story . Were did you get the idea? And I really liked the way your brother blamed it on you well done an amazing story ceap it up.
Hi Louis
Oh dear what a bad time your character is having in your story. You have really made me feel sorry for him by the way you have written your piece and the great use of vocabulary that paints a picture of the unfairness. Well done.
I really like the way you put a back ground to the story . Were did you get the idea? And I really liked the way your brother blamed it on you well done an amazing story ceap it up.