Hi Ben – what an imaginative idea for your 100wc! This is an exciting, engaging story that really grabs the reader’s attention – well done! A few things to consider are: the difference between their/there; also, do think about your ending – do you need the bit where you’re taken home? Sometimes it’s effective to leave things on a cliff-hanger. Remember it’s very tricky to tell a whole story in 100 words, so consider giving just a snapshot.
Keep on blogging!
Mr Kenyon (Team 100wc)
Hi Ben – what an imaginative idea for your 100wc! This is an exciting, engaging story that really grabs the reader’s attention – well done! A few things to consider are: the difference between their/there; also, do think about your ending – do you need the bit where you’re taken home? Sometimes it’s effective to leave things on a cliff-hanger. Remember it’s very tricky to tell a whole story in 100 words, so consider giving just a snapshot.
Keep on blogging!
Mr Kenyon (Team 100wc)
What an interesting story! It is very original.
Perhaps next time you could add a bit more description.
Well done!