The majic city of birds

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2 Responses to The majic city of birds

  1. Mr Kenyon (Team 100wc) says:

    Hi Ben – what an imaginative idea for your 100wc! This is an exciting, engaging story that really grabs the reader’s attention – well done! A few things to consider are: the difference between their/there; also, do think about your ending – do you need the bit where you’re taken home? Sometimes it’s effective to leave things on a cliff-hanger. Remember it’s very tricky to tell a whole story in 100 words, so consider giving just a snapshot.
    Keep on blogging!
    Mr Kenyon (Team 100wc)

  2. Gabriella says:

    What an interesting story! It is very original.
    Perhaps next time you could add a bit more description.
    Well done!

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