A great peice of work with great discriptions like” gracefully”. Furthermore, next time you look at this piece, do edit it and take out unnesessary commas, and add a title
Good work Matthew. There’s some great description here. Try not to mix up your tenses. Also, decide if you’re writing in first or third person and stick to it!
Wow! You’ve created a great scene with your writing and obviously have a great imagination. You’ve used some good vocabulary in your writing, I particularly like “gracefully”. I really enjoyed reading your writing and I hope you keep entering the 100 Word Challenge.
Well done!
Mrs Stones
A great peice of work with great discriptions like” gracefully”. Furthermore, next time you look at this piece, do edit it and take out unnesessary commas, and add a title
Good work Matthew. There’s some great description here. Try not to mix up your tenses. Also, decide if you’re writing in first or third person and stick to it!
Hi Matthew,
Wow! You’ve created a great scene with your writing and obviously have a great imagination. You’ve used some good vocabulary in your writing, I particularly like “gracefully”. I really enjoyed reading your writing and I hope you keep entering the 100 Word Challenge.
Well done!
Mrs Stones