An imaginative story, Luke. What were the birds after? Could Jack have done something different to killing the birds? Try and use more punctuation so that your sentences are not too long, and also “I” should always be in capitals.
Hello, thank you for entering the 100WC entry, I liked how you ended your story on a cliff hanger!
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An imaginative story, Luke. What were the birds after? Could Jack have done something different to killing the birds?
Try and use more punctuation so that your sentences are not too long, and also “I” should always be in capitals.
Hello, thank you for entering the 100WC entry, I liked how you ended your story on a cliff hanger!