Dear Milla,
I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge. I like how you have used describing words to give the reader a good image of what it’s like, such as ‘…I remember when we went to the Walton on the Naze and went swimming in the freezing cold Ocean…’ I also really like how you have used some ING openers ‘…Moving …’ Maybe next time you could use some similes ‘I remember when we went swimming in the freezing, cold water and swam as fast as a cheater on a skateboard.’ Overall I really enjoyed reading your work, well done and keep it up as I hope to read some more of your work on the blog.
From Julia. http://www.6d2012.highlawnprimary.net
Dear Milla,
I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge. I like how you have used describing words to give the reader a good image of what it’s like, such as ‘…I remember when we went to the Walton on the Naze and went swimming in the freezing cold Ocean…’ I also really like how you have used some ING openers ‘…Moving …’ Maybe next time you could use some similes ‘I remember when we went swimming in the freezing, cold water and swam as fast as a cheater on a skateboard.’ Overall I really enjoyed reading your work, well done and keep it up as I hope to read some more of your work on the blog.
From Julia.
http://www.6d2012.highlawnprimary.net
Thank you very much I definitely use that in my writing