Well done Freya, a great 100wc entry. You can really sense the frustration from the language you have used. Be careful with a few spellings…its “Fair” note “Fare”.
Well done Freya on this weeks 100WC.
I love the way you have described the chocolate fudge cake, it made my mouth water too! You have written well to make the reader know your disappointment, just be careful with your punctuation you need a comma after ‘goodies’ and after ‘friends'(near the end) leaving out ‘an’.
Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100WC.
Wow! Freya this is brilliant! You have used the prompt fantastically you also helped me to fell your emotions. Next time maybe you could watch your puncuation though.
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I really enjoyed reading your story! You have used some amazing adjectives to make your work interesting. I really like the way you have described the chocolate cake its making me want to have some now! Perhaps next time you could read through your work to double check your spellings and punctuation. Other than that this is a really good piece of work.
Hi freya,
I loved the way you included senses, but I didn’t understand how you were missing your birthday.
Well done Freya, a great 100wc entry. You can really sense the frustration from the language you have used. Be careful with a few spellings…its “Fair” note “Fare”.
Well done Freya on this weeks 100WC.
I love the way you have described the chocolate fudge cake, it made my mouth water too! You have written well to make the reader know your disappointment, just be careful with your punctuation you need a comma after ‘goodies’ and after ‘friends'(near the end) leaving out ‘an’.
Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100WC.
Wow! Freya this is brilliant! You have used the prompt fantastically you also helped me to fell your emotions. Next time maybe you could watch your puncuation though.
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I really want some cake now because you described it so perfectly. I could really feel what you were feeling. Good job and keep up the good work!
Hello Freya,
I really enjoyed reading your story! You have used some amazing adjectives to make your work interesting. I really like the way you have described the chocolate cake its making me want to have some now! Perhaps next time you could read through your work to double check your spellings and punctuation. Other than that this is a really good piece of work.
Miss J Callanan.