I think your work was good because you had the question at the top.
Also your commas in the work were properly used.
But you could have done somthing about why it can be good playing those games.
Great work.
I totally agree with you it does effect childrens lives in bad ways.
well done.Maybe next time give stronger reasons of why you should not play war games.
Hello James i really like your reasons for why children should not play games with violence in them and really agree with you.
Also i really like how much effort you put into this peace of work.
I personaly think that maybe you could add a bit more wrighting into this peace of this work but appart from that i love it ALL!
I think your work was good because you had the question at the top.
Also your commas in the work were properly used.
But you could have done somthing about why it can be good playing those games.
Thanks Evan that advise was helpful.
Welldone James you have used good points about why people should’nt play whith war toys.
Although you should make it a bit longer.
Thanks oliver1
Great work.
I totally agree with you it does effect childrens lives in bad ways.
well done.Maybe next time give stronger reasons of why you should not play war games.
I like your work. You have a point. Nexst time give more resons.