Thank you for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week. You’ve written a very heartfelt message to the children in the Philippines which shows great empathy towards them. I like your central message of believing in yourself, as they are certainly going to have to do this as they rebuild their lives.
Well done.
Mrs Stones – Miriam Lord Primary, Bradford
Hi Melisa,
I love your work.I has lots and lots of persuasive writing. If I were someone in the Philippines, I would always look back at your letter and think about how lucky I was to be given that letter.
Next time when you blog something, check your spellings and capital letters. Losses is spelt wrong (you only put one s before the es) and sometimes after a full-aop you didn’t put a capital letter.Well done, I am looking forwards to reading another one of your posts.
Hi Melisa,
Great piece of writing, I love it. Next time check your spelling because losses is spelt wrong ( you spell it with two s before the es). Also check that you put a capital letter after a full-stop because in some places you didn’t. Can’t wait for you to publish another piece of writing!
Hi Melisa,
Thank you for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week. You’ve written a very heartfelt message to the children in the Philippines which shows great empathy towards them. I like your central message of believing in yourself, as they are certainly going to have to do this as they rebuild their lives.
Well done.
Mrs Stones – Miriam Lord Primary, Bradford
Hi Melisa,
I love your work.I has lots and lots of persuasive writing. If I were someone in the Philippines, I would always look back at your letter and think about how lucky I was to be given that letter.
Next time when you blog something, check your spellings and capital letters. Losses is spelt wrong (you only put one s before the es) and sometimes after a full-aop you didn’t put a capital letter.Well done, I am looking forwards to reading another one of your posts.
Hi Melisa,
Great piece of writing, I love it. Next time check your spelling because losses is spelt wrong ( you spell it with two s before the es). Also check that you put a capital letter after a full-stop because in some places you didn’t. Can’t wait for you to publish another piece of writing!
Lucy