Lucy that was amazing I loved reading it. If I was one of the kids in the Philippines I would be encouraged by that. The quality of the writing was defiantly very high. Next time try and add some conjunctions by lengthening your sentences but apart from that great job.
Hi Lucy,
you have written a wonderful peace of work .I enjoyed it amazingly and if I was a Philippines child I would be encouraged
ENORMOUSLY .I would have used every peace of your wonderful advice. You have a very big talent at encouraging anybody at any age, but next time you should use not so many full stops but replace them with some conjunctions or commas . I hope you keep this good work up. :):)
Wow Lucy! That letter was amazing. If I was a a Philippines child I would be taking that advice on board and trying to be confident. Next time try and make things a bit clearer because statements such as: ‘I hope you get through your life’ May not be clear to some Philippine children. But over-all it was a very strong letter.
i really liked your work lucy and that you put a lot of effort into it if i was one of those philippine kids i would listen to you because that would have been very helpful for them
I really enjoyed reading your writing. You really expressed the emotions and made it stand out. It also would make me feel better if I Philippines child.
Hi Lucy that was a really heart warming piece of writing it will very most likely take the chlidrens mind off the storm and help them carry on through life. However you may need to explain yourself a bit stronger to the children they may not understand you. But otherwise it was a lovely piece of writing.
Lucy that was amazing I loved reading it. If I was one of the kids in the Philippines I would be encouraged by that. The quality of the writing was defiantly very high. Next time try and add some conjunctions by lengthening your sentences but apart from that great job.
Hi Lucy,
you have written a wonderful peace of work .I enjoyed it amazingly and if I was a Philippines child I would be encouraged
ENORMOUSLY .I would have used every peace of your wonderful advice. You have a very big talent at encouraging anybody at any age, but next time you should use not so many full stops but replace them with some conjunctions or commas . I hope you keep this good work up. :):)
Well done, Lucy.
A very nice letter, clearly written, expressing lots of sympathy and support.
Keep up the good work!
Hi Lucy,
Your work was great.I loved how much encouragement you put into your work.
Next time, try and add some commas and some adjectives.
Wow Lucy! That letter was amazing. If I was a a Philippines child I would be taking that advice on board and trying to be confident. Next time try and make things a bit clearer because statements such as: ‘I hope you get through your life’ May not be clear to some Philippine children. But over-all it was a very strong letter.
Maddie
i really liked your work lucy and that you put a lot of effort into it if i was one of those philippine kids i would listen to you because that would have been very helpful for them
I really enjoyed reading your writing. You really expressed the emotions and made it stand out. It also would make me feel better if I Philippines child.
Anna
Hi Lucy that was a really heart warming piece of writing it will very most likely take the chlidrens mind off the storm and help them carry on through life. However you may need to explain yourself a bit stronger to the children they may not understand you. But otherwise it was a lovely piece of writing.