Hi Ethan,
What a great continuation of the comic strip. I really like your mix of speech and narrative. I can tell you are quite an accomplished storyteller as you are aware of your reader and include lots of extras such as ‘…he replied with a touch of anger in his voice.’ I think that you got some good characterisation across in such few words too.
I enjoyed reading your work this week and would love to know whether they did go in and what happened next. Well done!
Hi Ethan,
What a great continuation of the comic strip. I really like your mix of speech and narrative. I can tell you are quite an accomplished storyteller as you are aware of your reader and include lots of extras such as ‘…he replied with a touch of anger in his voice.’ I think that you got some good characterisation across in such few words too.
I enjoyed reading your work this week and would love to know whether they did go in and what happened next. Well done!