Hi Owen,
That was great! I loved the ending it was very funny . you have done a great job at impressing me and I hope in the future
that you will be able to impress everyone that reads your posts. keep up all your wonderful effort and keep using humour
also wonderful description. :):)
This is quite an intense story, Owen. It must have been quite the weapon to do that much damage in 1 second! You did well to use a variety of terms instead of just using said. This helps the reader better understand the emotions of the character.
Thank you for submitting this week.
Mrs. Middleton
Team 100wc
Hi Owen,
That was great! I loved the ending it was very funny . you have done a great job at impressing me and I hope in the future
that you will be able to impress everyone that reads your posts. keep up all your wonderful effort and keep using humour
also wonderful description. :):)
This is quite an intense story, Owen. It must have been quite the weapon to do that much damage in 1 second! You did well to use a variety of terms instead of just using said. This helps the reader better understand the emotions of the character.
Thank you for submitting this week.
Mrs. Middleton
Team 100wc
This was a very strong story. I liked the way you used a variety of words instead of said.
Maddie