Hi Louie, I really like your piece of of writing as it is very descriptive and exiting. It nearly made me fall of my chair with both laughter and excitement. I like how you describe the maths teacher named John.
Oh huh this was a scary story, all that descriptive writing really helped to set the scene. Your use of punctuation really helped to create the tension and pace of the story.
I liked the idea that the scary person was the Maths teacher.
Louie, you manage to pack a lot of drama and action into your story. I like how you have used your maths teacher in your writing. Try to use some more adjectives to help the reader create an image of the characters.
Hi Louie, I really like your piece of of writing as it is very descriptive and exiting. It nearly made me fall of my chair with both laughter and excitement. I like how you describe the maths teacher named John.
From Ethan
Oh huh this was a scary story, all that descriptive writing really helped to set the scene. Your use of punctuation really helped to create the tension and pace of the story.
I liked the idea that the scary person was the Maths teacher.
Louie, you manage to pack a lot of drama and action into your story. I like how you have used your maths teacher in your writing. Try to use some more adjectives to help the reader create an image of the characters.