I really like the way you have started your writing with dialogue, this grabs the reader’s attention and makes them want to read more. You’ve used some good vocabulary to build up the atmosphere in your writing.
Thanks for entering the 100 Word Challenge!
Mrs Stones – Miriam Lord Bradford http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/
Dear Connor,
I really like the descriptive words you used in this week’s 100 Word Challenge prompt like “the ground was creaking up and down like a seesaw” and “a strange creature with gleaming gold on his bony back.” Those phrases really help the reader to paint a clear picture of the story in their mind. One suggestion for next time is to work on your use of quotation marks when the character’s talk to one another. You can look at a chapter book for examples.
Great job this week!
Mrs. Schmidt
Grade 3 Teacher in PA, USA
Hi Connor,
I really like the way you have started your writing with dialogue, this grabs the reader’s attention and makes them want to read more. You’ve used some good vocabulary to build up the atmosphere in your writing.
Thanks for entering the 100 Word Challenge!
Mrs Stones – Miriam Lord Bradford
http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/
Dear Connor,
I really like the descriptive words you used in this week’s 100 Word Challenge prompt like “the ground was creaking up and down like a seesaw” and “a strange creature with gleaming gold on his bony back.” Those phrases really help the reader to paint a clear picture of the story in their mind. One suggestion for next time is to work on your use of quotation marks when the character’s talk to one another. You can look at a chapter book for examples.
Great job this week!
Mrs. Schmidt
Grade 3 Teacher in PA, USA