This is an interesting story. I like the way that you mention your friends saying “be gentle he’s only 2”, and then at the end of the story, you become “like a baby”: there is a clever connection between these 2 parts of the story. You have highlighted how children can sometimes be unkind and the effect this can have on others. Well done Jude!
I really liked the way you used lots of similies in your work I also like the connection between, “Be gentle he’s only 2 and, I felt so cramped up I lay in bed like a baby.I canit wait to read more. However you forgot a full stop at the end.
This is an interesting story. I like the way that you mention your friends saying “be gentle he’s only 2”, and then at the end of the story, you become “like a baby”: there is a clever connection between these 2 parts of the story. You have highlighted how children can sometimes be unkind and the effect this can have on others. Well done Jude!
You had thgoten a full stop at the end of your work.
But over all it was good.
I really liked the way you used lots of similies in your work I also like the connection between, “Be gentle he’s only 2 and, I felt so cramped up I lay in bed like a baby.I canit wait to read more. However you forgot a full stop at the end.