Very good Josephine! I liked your imagination such as when Tom goes through the painting and that you desribed the coldness. Also, I loved when you said “he could pick the icicles off his house.” I think you could improve by using more punctuation, because on a few occasions, you didn’t use punctuation.
Very good Josephine! I liked your imagination such as when Tom goes through the painting and that you desribed the coldness. Also, I loved when you said “he could pick the icicles off his house.” I think you could improve by using more punctuation, because on a few occasions, you didn’t use punctuation.