Hi Matilda,
I love that you have use speech and checked your work. my favourite bit was when you said ‘As I slowly crept on this bridge, I saw a gust of wind swooping the bridge to one side.
My only suggestion is you could use some more adjectives.
But overall Well Done!
Well done Matilda. This is a really good bit of writing! I am glad you have used lots of wow words and punctuation . Maybe next time you should check your work through.
Excellent Matilda! this is a great piece of work,remember to check your spellings and missed out words but apart from that it was fabulous.
Hi Matilda,
I love that you have use speech and checked your work. my favourite bit was when you said ‘As I slowly crept on this bridge, I saw a gust of wind swooping the bridge to one side.
My only suggestion is you could use some more adjectives.
But overall Well Done!
Well done Matilda. This is a really good bit of writing! I am glad you have used lots of wow words and punctuation . Maybe next time you should check your work through.
This is an excellent piece of writing. You have used really good wow words. Next time check your work.