Excellent Tobi! I really like all the exciting descriptions that you have been able to use in your work. I particularly like the description about ‘my heart beats were hammering against my chest like an unworthy person trying to escape through a prison cell.’ You have also used paragraphs well.
Just remember which type of here you should use:
– Here means it is right here….
– Hear is when you hear something and you can remember this because it actually has the word ear in it.
Excellent Tobi! I really like all the exciting descriptions that you have been able to use in your work. I particularly like the description about ‘my heart beats were hammering against my chest like an unworthy person trying to escape through a prison cell.’ You have also used paragraphs well.
Just remember which type of here you should use:
– Here means it is right here….
– Hear is when you hear something and you can remember this because it actually has the word ear in it.