Well done Jemima! I enjoyed reading this and I am impressed that you have remembered how to punctuate speech accurately with a new speaker on a new line. I also think it is great that you are using different words for the word ‘said.’
– I want to hear more about Terry and Tom uprooting this tree! The mother has come in a bit too early because it was getting exciting!
Well done Jemima! I enjoyed reading this and I am impressed that you have remembered how to punctuate speech accurately with a new speaker on a new line. I also think it is great that you are using different words for the word ‘said.’
– I want to hear more about Terry and Tom uprooting this tree! The mother has come in a bit too early because it was getting exciting!
Thank you for your kind and helpful comment.
I like how you do it in third person I really like the feel of the story. You could try to use more of the 5 senses.
thanks Ciara.