I am a Show Off

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4 Responses to I am a Show Off

  1. Miss Essex says:

    Well done Jemima! I enjoyed reading this and I am impressed that you have remembered how to punctuate speech accurately with a new speaker on a new line. I also think it is great that you are using different words for the word ‘said.’
    – I want to hear more about Terry and Tom uprooting this tree! The mother has come in a bit too early because it was getting exciting!

  2. dowlc says:

    I like how you do it in third person I really like the feel of the story. You could try to use more of the 5 senses.

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