Well done Charlotte. You have managed to describe a day which you can remember very clearly. I think the fact that you have started and finished your work with the same sentence is very powerful and great use of the ellipsis at the end.
– Could you have gone into even more detail when describing Tiger?
Wow Charlotte! I love your brilliant description of Tiger arriving! When you used the ellipsis at the end I wanted it to be a never-ending story! You have used punctuation well.
Maybe you could add a little more description on Tigers arrival?
All the same very well done! I loved this blog!
I like the sentence ‘ It was as hard to doge him as riding a pig’ . you should try to add in a bit more description.
Well done Charlotte. You have managed to describe a day which you can remember very clearly. I think the fact that you have started and finished your work with the same sentence is very powerful and great use of the ellipsis at the end.
– Could you have gone into even more detail when describing Tiger?
Thank you Miss Essex. I will remember that. Maybe I could say he is ginger by using a simile. Or maybe I could use alliteration! Thanks again.
Wow Charlotte! I love your brilliant description of Tiger arriving! When you used the ellipsis at the end I wanted it to be a never-ending story! You have used punctuation well.
Maybe you could add a little more description on Tigers arrival?
All the same very well done! I loved this blog!