Wow! What an exciting birthday Tony! I think I would be terrified if someone brought a boa constrictor into my house! You are starting to use some good conjunctions (because and but) and I am pleased that you are able to give some details about what the snake looked like.
– To add even more detail about the day. For example, did you hold any of the animals? Did you feed any of the animals? If so, what did they eat? Were you scared at any point?
Wow! What an exciting birthday Tony! I think I would be terrified if someone brought a boa constrictor into my house! You are starting to use some good conjunctions (because and but) and I am pleased that you are able to give some details about what the snake looked like.
– To add even more detail about the day. For example, did you hold any of the animals? Did you feed any of the animals? If so, what did they eat? Were you scared at any point?