The Haunted Alley

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3 Responses to The Haunted Alley

  1. Miss Essex says:

    Well done Maddy. You have been able to use some great descriptions in your writing. You are really starting to set the scene for the reader.
    – Make sure you read your work through and edit it to make sure each sentence makes sense.

  2. Charlotte says:

    This is a really good piece of writing Maddy.
    – You have used similes.
    – You have used loads of WOW words.
    – Try and you a variety of punctuation. E.g ! . , ; : ” ‘ ? .

  3. Zalie wise says:

    Brilliant and interesting writing maddy you are a true author

    Zalie

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