On Christmas day

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5 Responses to On Christmas day

  1. Miss Essex says:

    Well done Lal! That sounds like a very fun Christmas. I am really pleased that you have remembered that a new speaker always starts on a new line. Keep up the good work.
    – Make sure you always read your work through to check each sentence makes sense and then edit your work.

    • lal says:

      Thank you Miss Essex!
      I will make sure I edit my blog after I have finished typing, and check my sentences that it makes sense.

  2. lal says:

    I like when you don’t only say said mum you say different words like exclaimed. and I also like it when you said awsom new bike with flames like on a motor bike because it makes me feel like I want to have that bike.
    well done.

  3. scarlet says:

    Hi Lal,
    I love that you have chosen to write about Christmas because it is one of my favourite days. I love that you have used speech and used a rhetorical question.
    But to make sure everyone understands your writing, at the bottom you could change the font because I found it hard to read.
    But overall I think you have done a piece of amazing work!

  4. Zalie wise says:

    Great work Lal I loved it I thought it was brilliant and amazing

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