Hi Laila,
Great peice of work you have done here. I love the way you have managed to slip in some personification because I know that I find it hard to get in. It was very dramatic however it was not to busy and I like that. Keep up the hard work. By the way I think you should read through because some things have incorrect grammer. Well done any way.
Oh how dramatic! I feel very sad now. What a powerful piece of writing. A couple of terrific metaphors.
Hi Laila,
Great peice of work you have done here. I love the way you have managed to slip in some personification because I know that I find it hard to get in. It was very dramatic however it was not to busy and I like that. Keep up the hard work. By the way I think you should read through because some things have incorrect grammer. Well done any way.