Hi Aaima! well done for your 100wc this week – I really enjoyed reading it. You’ve left me on tenterhooks – I need to know what happened next! Your work is very dramatic and you’ve used some lovely language like ‘drifted’ and ‘floating’.
Next time, really make sure that you check your punctuation – there are a few commas and full stops missing – can you spot where they should be? Also, the word ‘I’ needs to have a capital letter (because you are important!).
Hi Aaima! well done for your 100wc this week – I really enjoyed reading it. You’ve left me on tenterhooks – I need to know what happened next! Your work is very dramatic and you’ve used some lovely language like ‘drifted’ and ‘floating’.
Next time, really make sure that you check your punctuation – there are a few commas and full stops missing – can you spot where they should be? Also, the word ‘I’ needs to have a capital letter (because you are important!).
I’m looking forward to seeing more of your work on the 100wc,
Mr K 🙂
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