Hello Jesse, thanks for taking part in the 100wc. Oh dear, what a shame it rained. Don’t forget you are important , so always use a capital I. Well done for using speech marks.
How long did the mum spend doing her hair? Typical that it had to rain at the wrong time. Liked your writing. I agree with Mrs Cohen that you need to remember capital letters in your writing.
Hello Jesse, thanks for taking part in the 100wc. Oh dear, what a shame it rained. Don’t forget you are important , so always use a capital I. Well done for using speech marks.
How long did the mum spend doing her hair? Typical that it had to rain at the wrong time. Liked your writing. I agree with Mrs Cohen that you need to remember capital letters in your writing.
Jesse, I really liked the way that you used your family as the characters. Don’t forget to put in a little more punctuation