The Mysterious House

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8 Responses to The Mysterious House

  1. dexter says:

    That was really discriptive!What happens next?Do ghosts and ghouls come into the daylight and mysteriosly force him inside onto the muddy carpet?What does intrepid and nook and cranny mean?

  2. 572AA says:

    What a great description of intrepid Ronan’s exploration of a house. Glad you are resisting any tendency to ‘guild the lily’.
    Well done!
    from Mr Evans

  3. louis says:

    I absolutely amazing description! I loved how at the beginning he was all brave but at the end he was a huge scaredy cat!
    you’ve definately given me some ideas for my writing. i can’t improve

  4. Grace says:

    Hi Rafi, your description in the ‘Mysterious house’ was fernonamal. my spine shiverd as i felt the tension. What genra
    did you set for? Epic or Detective? mabey you could add a sub plot?

  5. lucas says:

    WOW I think thats really good how did you come up with that .I like all the discription .

  6. Alisa says:

    Hi, your “Mysterious house” had lots of discription. It realy gives you an image of what is hapening and the atmosfere. What do you think the scaryest part?

  7. Miss Berry says:

    What a wonderfully detailed description, Rafi. I’d like to know more about the mysteries that this house is hiding…

  8. Boaz (Rafi's Brother) says:

    What a wonderful description Rafi. It really blew my socks off.
    Well Done.

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