Wow! Grace you really put good words in it makes me want to read on.I keep on thinking of my own series of the next bit of your story BUT IT JUST CANT BE DONE BY ME!!!! I love the bit when you explained really well with lots of adjectives : ‘But now the stone chimney pieces were crumbling and the fire places were covered in dust. But it was not the rundowness that people hid from. No; it was something quite different.’
You could have explained more on this bit: ‘But whenever I ask what year it is people scream. And fall over’
i think you could have rote But when ever I ask what year it is people shreek and fall down to the hard ground with a bang.
Wow! Grace you really put good words in it makes me want to read on.I keep on thinking of my own series of the next bit of your story BUT IT JUST CANT BE DONE BY ME!!!! I love the bit when you explained really well with lots of adjectives : ‘But now the stone chimney pieces were crumbling and the fire places were covered in dust. But it was not the rundowness that people hid from. No; it was something quite different.’
You could have explained more on this bit: ‘But whenever I ask what year it is people scream. And fall over’
i think you could have rote But when ever I ask what year it is people shreek and fall down to the hard ground with a bang.