The spider in my garden

Posted on March 18, 2012 by Deleted User
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2 Responses to The spider in my garden

  1. Jessica says:
    March 18, 2012 at 5:39 pm

    Hi Laila,
    This is great and you’ve used some great descriptive words such as horrified and scurried.
    Try to use commas to space your work out more though.
    Well done!
    🙂

  2. Laila's sister yasmin says:
    March 21, 2012 at 6:31 pm

    I love your adjectives and verbs ! Mabey next time use some more commas.

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