Laila
I think that your description was amazing I really like your description of the painted sky. Next time when someone else speaks go onto another line. Well done!
I love your description of the sky; It paints a vivid picture in my mind. I also like your choice of words to describe the knee injury “… stinging feeling…” I have two small suggestion for you. The first is about the way to write speech. You need a comma after the last word of speech and before the closing speech marks. The second is not to leave a space before the full stop but leave two spaces after it. Other than those small points, your punctuation is very good. 🙂
Laila
I think that your description was amazing I really like your description of the painted sky. Next time when someone else speaks go onto another line. Well done!
Hi Anna
I love your description of the sky; It paints a vivid picture in my mind. I also like your choice of words to describe the knee injury “… stinging feeling…” I have two small suggestion for you. The first is about the way to write speech. You need a comma after the last word of speech and before the closing speech marks. The second is not to leave a space before the full stop but leave two spaces after it. Other than those small points, your punctuation is very good. 🙂
Laila
I think your story is brilliant especially your description
please keep on blogging your brilliant work.