Hello Grace,
Your work was very creepy and frightening. The description you used was very good and so were the fantastic connectives. You could have added in some adverbs but it is quite hard to do so don’t worry about it. Overall I thought your writing was very good and was up to the standards of the blog!
Grace I really liked your story idea, it is very dramatic. Did she fall asleep?
Hello Grace,
Your work was very creepy and frightening. The description you used was very good and so were the fantastic connectives. You could have added in some adverbs but it is quite hard to do so don’t worry about it. Overall I thought your writing was very good and was up to the standards of the blog!
Grace
I really like your scary story it was very spooky you created a great atmstphere by using some good connectives. Great story.