Hello Can,
I really liked your work because…
1. Of all the really good adjectives, for example: Frightening, mumbled, nightmare, shivered and bellowed.
2. The story line was really easy to understand.
However, you need to remember to…
1. Use a capital letter at the beginning of a sentence.
2. Start a new line when someone new is speaking.
3. Don’t use block capitals.
Apart from that everything was fine so keep up the good work. When are you going to write part 2?
Can
I thought your story had some great adjectives such as:
Shivered
Mumbled
Frightened
This choice of words really made me feel scared. But next don’t forget your capital letters. Well done.
Hello Can,
I really liked your work because…
1. Of all the really good adjectives, for example: Frightening, mumbled, nightmare, shivered and bellowed.
2. The story line was really easy to understand.
However, you need to remember to…
1. Use a capital letter at the beginning of a sentence.
2. Start a new line when someone new is speaking.
3. Don’t use block capitals.
Apart from that everything was fine so keep up the good work. When are you going to write part 2?
Can
I thought your story had some great adjectives such as:
Shivered
Mumbled
Frightened
This choice of words really made me feel scared. But next don’t forget your capital letters. Well done.
Can
I really liked this story because of your great words here are some:
Shivered. However
Bellowed. Nightmare teeth
Well done.
Can
I thought that your story was really good
Especially the words you used
Well done liam I liked how you described the vampire with powerfull words for exsample nightmare teeth well done keep the good work up.
Interesting piece! Keep up the great work! I love the part about his nightmarish teeth!
I can’t wait for part 2! You are an excellent writer.