Hello Anna,
I thought your work was very good because…
1.Of all the great adjectives, such as: Retorted, chanted and dazed.
2. the story line was funny but just like a normal book.
I tried over and over again to find a fault but I couldn’t, so well done for perfect work!
Anna I thought your piece was well written and you had remembered to check it for spelling mistakes which is great. I did wonder who Mr Ringo was and why he was dazed?
Hey Anna,
Love the blog, thought this piece was written extremely well, but remember to punctuate the sentences which don’t contain speech. I particularly like the similes and metaphors; very clever. 🙂 xxx
Anna. I liked the way you described May’s realisation she was suddenly on her own. A good selection of unusual names too. Ms Sersonvil’s last comment is a bit sarcastic – don’t try that at home!
Signed
Your Dad
Hello Anna,
I thought your work was very good because…
1.Of all the great adjectives, such as: Retorted, chanted and dazed.
2. the story line was funny but just like a normal book.
I tried over and over again to find a fault but I couldn’t, so well done for perfect work!
Anna I thought your piece was well written and you had remembered to check it for spelling mistakes which is great. I did wonder who Mr Ringo was and why he was dazed?
Dear Mummy
Mr Ringo is ment to be a fellow teacher of Ms Sersonvil. He is bit tired I think.
Hey Anna,
Love the blog, thought this piece was written extremely well, but remember to punctuate the sentences which don’t contain speech. I particularly like the similes and metaphors; very clever. 🙂 xxx
Anna. I liked the way you described May’s realisation she was suddenly on her own. A good selection of unusual names too. Ms Sersonvil’s last comment is a bit sarcastic – don’t try that at home!
Signed
Your Dad
Anna,
I thought your story was brilliant and so was your discretion ,
I can’t wait to read more of your story’s.