Hello Alexandra,
I really liked your work because…
1. It was very funny.
2.It was very imaginative.
Remember to…
1.Start a new line when somebody new is speaking.
2. Always put speech marks at the beginning of speech.
3. Write who is speaking at the end of speech.
4. Not to write in block capitals.
Apart from that everything was fine and deserved to have a spotlight on the blog.
Hi,
This is really funny and very imaginative. I love the idea.
Try to include more commas, it will really help your writing be more spaced out.
Well done!
Alexandra I really liked your funny post and particularly the idea of a sacred banana gun! I also like your asides to the reader when you say for example “I know it its cool”. Its a great way to connect with your reader and its exactly the right tone of voice for a funny piece like this. Well done. There are some speech marks missing.
Alexandra I really enjoyed reading your amazing 1o0 wc! I like the way you have used an explanation mark to make the story more intresting. Keep up the good work!
Alexander, this is a really funny story. I laughed when I read about the banana gun. What other fruit is in the bowl?
How imagenative really funny great humor.
Anna
Your posts are great but imaginative is spelt imaginative!!
Signed
Your Dad.
Hello Alexandra,
I really liked your work because…
1. It was very funny.
2.It was very imaginative.
Remember to…
1.Start a new line when somebody new is speaking.
2. Always put speech marks at the beginning of speech.
3. Write who is speaking at the end of speech.
4. Not to write in block capitals.
Apart from that everything was fine and deserved to have a spotlight on the blog.
Hi,
This is really funny and very imaginative. I love the idea.
Try to include more commas, it will really help your writing be more spaced out.
Well done!
Alexandra I really liked your funny post and particularly the idea of a sacred banana gun! I also like your asides to the reader when you say for example “I know it its cool”. Its a great way to connect with your reader and its exactly the right tone of voice for a funny piece like this. Well done. There are some speech marks missing.
Thank you so much for your comments. I realised my speech mistakes as soon as I had published this piece that I created
so suddenly at school.
Alexandra I really enjoyed reading your amazing 1o0 wc! I like the way you have used an explanation mark to make the story more intresting. Keep up the good work!