Harry, this was an amazing story and its close to being perfect. However, I found that in a couple of sentences though, you could have added a bit of punctuation like a comma. Your ending sentence was really good too- such a waste. Keep on blogging…
I really enjoyed your 100WC entry Harry! You included a good amount of detail (that list of the different kinds of eggs made me a hungry!) and I loved your phrase “we begged her till her brain came out”! It was good to hear you didn’t mean it literally. Keep up the great work!
Good job, I like it a lot. I really felt like you knew what you were saying in that I like it. Nice job!
Harry, this was an amazing story and its close to being perfect. However, I found that in a couple of sentences though, you could have added a bit of punctuation like a comma. Your ending sentence was really good too- such a waste. Keep on blogging…
Well done Harry, I really liked the idea within your story, especially the humour and the twist at the end. Keep up the good work!
I really enjoyed your 100WC entry Harry! You included a good amount of detail (that list of the different kinds of eggs made me a hungry!) and I loved your phrase “we begged her till her brain came out”! It was good to hear you didn’t mean it literally. Keep up the great work!