I really enjoyed reading this. I liked how you included Rowan’s feelings. To improve it you could start speech on a new line but apart from that it was amazing and I can’t wait to read chapter two!
I really like your story. I think it’s great that you use the prompt right at the beginning and then you are free to take the story in any direction you like. Well done for using speech in the story too, and thoughts. Both help to make the story come alive and give a greater picture of your characters.
I am very intrigued about the metal thumb! I would like to know more…
Hi Ella!
Brilliant story it really made you want to read on! I really liked how you builded up the story! Why did you think of Rowens Mum having a metal thumb?I espcially liked your ending. I HOPE YOU CARRY ON WITH IT!
Hi Ella, Thank you for sharing you 100WC. I really enjoyed reading about your characters and the relationship that they had with each other. You used speech to aid your writing – well done. Next time read your work through carefully and look out for where you could use some commas within your setences.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100WC)
It was nice but you could have put in more description to draw the reader in.
The beggining is really good, I would love to hear the rest of it!
I really enjoyed reading this. I liked how you included Rowan’s feelings. To improve it you could start speech on a new line but apart from that it was amazing and I can’t wait to read chapter two!
WOW! Brilliant
I really enjoyed it.
Why did you pick the name Rowen? But it was still good.
COOL
I really like your story. I think it’s great that you use the prompt right at the beginning and then you are free to take the story in any direction you like. Well done for using speech in the story too, and thoughts. Both help to make the story come alive and give a greater picture of your characters.
I am very intrigued about the metal thumb! I would like to know more…
Hi Ella, your story is raely good and creative because the story could go any where! I cant wait to read chapter two!
Hi Ella!
Brilliant story it really made you want to read on! I really liked how you builded up the story! Why did you think of Rowens Mum having a metal thumb?I espcially liked your ending. I HOPE YOU CARRY ON WITH IT!
Merley:)
Hi Ella, Thank you for sharing you 100WC. I really enjoyed reading about your characters and the relationship that they had with each other. You used speech to aid your writing – well done. Next time read your work through carefully and look out for where you could use some commas within your setences.
Keep up the great work.
Mrs McGuinnity (Team 100WC)