Wow, are you sure you’re a Year 5? I love the word Hoarsely as it emphasizes how scared you were. I predict that your next 100wc will be even better. I am hoping to see yours next time. In addititon, I love how you put a rhetorical question at the end to get the reader thinking. You used some of the A CARP PIE. (A- ADVERBS. C- CONNECTIVES A- ADJECTIVES R-RELATIVE PRONOUN P-PUCTUATION P-PREPOSITION I- ING WORD E- ED WORD)
Keep it up!
Emilia
6D
Wow Alice, what a great 100WC! I like the way you started with speech and ended with a question. Excellent punctuation and some really well-chosen descriptive language, well done. Keep it up!
Hi Alice,
I’m also going to say ‘WOW!’ Your vocabulary is truly amazing. I wish I could think up such fantastic word choices when I’m writing. I really enjoyed reading your 100WC and look forward to reading the next. Thank you for sharing it! 🙂
Dear Alice,
I would have never expected that ending! I thought it was very creative, and just out of curiosity, did the dragon ever become friends with you? Because that would be real cool.
From,
Aidan
Wow, are you sure you’re a Year 5? I love the word Hoarsely as it emphasizes how scared you were. I predict that your next 100wc will be even better. I am hoping to see yours next time. In addititon, I love how you put a rhetorical question at the end to get the reader thinking. You used some of the A CARP PIE. (A- ADVERBS. C- CONNECTIVES A- ADJECTIVES R-RELATIVE PRONOUN P-PUCTUATION P-PREPOSITION I- ING WORD E- ED WORD)
Keep it up!
Emilia
6D
Wow Alice, what a great 100WC! I like the way you started with speech and ended with a question. Excellent punctuation and some really well-chosen descriptive language, well done. Keep it up!
Hi Alice,
I’m also going to say ‘WOW!’ Your vocabulary is truly amazing. I wish I could think up such fantastic word choices when I’m writing. I really enjoyed reading your 100WC and look forward to reading the next. Thank you for sharing it! 🙂
Dear Alice,
I would have never expected that ending! I thought it was very creative, and just out of curiosity, did the dragon ever become friends with you? Because that would be real cool.
From,
Aidan
In the end they became best friends!
Alice (Tetherdown Primary)