I enjoyed reading your update written about the recent swimming gala. It sounds like the event was exciting. You provided great detail and excitement in writing about the results of the day. I truly felt like I was at the sporting event. If you work on editing for spelling errors, it would make your blog a little easier to read. Well done!
I love your use of colour and, the fact that you make me really enngaged with the day !!
The one wish is maybe your spelling could inprove. Good luck ….. Can’t wait for your next post !
I like your post.It made me feel like i was there. You could improve on spelling and put the commas in the right place.Apart from that i thought it was good
Great!!! descriptive language also you included the five double w who ,what, when ,where and why. I liked how you said “coca jumped up in the air happily because they won” because you described how they felt.
Hello,
I liked this piece of writing because of its description of the gala, it’s very good writing altogether.
However, I still don’t know what pepsi and cola meant?
I enjoyed reading your update written about the recent swimming gala. It sounds like the event was exciting. You provided great detail and excitement in writing about the results of the day. I truly felt like I was at the sporting event. If you work on editing for spelling errors, it would make your blog a little easier to read. Well done!
I love your use of colour and, the fact that you make me really enngaged with the day !!
The one wish is maybe your spelling could inprove. Good luck ….. Can’t wait for your next post !
I like your post.It made me feel like i was there. You could improve on spelling and put the commas in the right place.Apart from that i thought it was good
Great!!! descriptive language also you included the five double w who ,what, when ,where and why. I liked how you said “coca jumped up in the air happily because they won” because you described how they felt.
Hello,
I liked this piece of writing because of its description of the gala, it’s very good writing altogether.
However, I still don’t know what pepsi and cola meant?